Partly Cloudy writing
Partly cloudy
Quickly the birds raced down to drop off the pets and babies to the stinky houses. Then the pelicans ran away into the clouds like magic to pick up another animal. The magical cloud called Midget made a dog. Sadly the grey cloud didn't live with the pink cloud. So he made a crocodile.Then his pelican whose name was Jack came to pick it up. When he came back to the grey cloud he took a ram in a bag. He came back and he had made a porcupine who was covered in spikes. Then he put it in a soft white bag with the spikes coming through. He came back and went to a different cloud so he got full of rage and started to cry. Then the bird came back with safety gear and the cloud gave him a Electric eel.
The end
Hi Charlie-Gurl,
ReplyDeleteThere are some good adverbs and adjectives in this story. You are obviously thinking about your writing goals and making a big effort to achieve them. We watched some of Partly Cloudy in class the other day to practise inferencing. I would like to see the whole movie one day.
Mrs Bingham
Hi I like you partly cloudy writing
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